Please Do Now:
- Read the following first draft: http://mariap2011.wordpress.com/2008/10/15/hispanic-heritage-assembly-first-draft/
- And the following final draft: http://eicweissjournalism.wordpress.com/2008/10/23/final-edit-front-page-hispanic-heritage/
- Discuss how this article could have been improved by: 1) The primary author (ahead of the event and immediately afterwards), 2) The news editor, 3) The EIC, 4) The graphic editor, and 5) The journalism advisor.
Today, students will:
- Discuss improvements to the newsroom structure.
- Revise an article that has potential
- Rework dummy
- Rework project timeline
Tonight’s homework is:
- Follow deadlines of project timeline
- 96 <–print off, fill out and bring back Friday (will be graded)
- 97 <– same
- 98 <– same
- 99 <–same
Ok, Weissy Im going to try to be critical of my own work so here goes…
- My first draft could have contained a lot more information and specially quotes.
-Alessia always does a great job but since it was short timed and it was done on paper i guess thats where the faults lie.
- EIC – Miriam did an amazing job at catching any mistakes and im really happy about how it turned out.
- Mr.Weiss weeeelllll I guess you also helped. But i think that this paper needs structure and at the same time for it to be fun I’m not saying you should become all psycho and hunt us down if we dont do certain things, but I think that when you do that it helps.
In the second draft, the sentence about Hurican Ike was unessesary. The artical is about the event not the students geting in.
The second draft was indead better. It had much more detail with quotes.
1) There is a lot of info missing here and a lot of questions that can be asked. The sentences are vague and the interviews are missing. Obviously, the author needed to interview all the people involved in the event, or at least Ms. Roffe before the event.
2) The news editor should have edited the article, or at least rearranged and improved some grammar, and posted it on the blog. That way, the author should have had time to interview more people and input the new information.
3) I’ll take suggestions. I need to keep a better schedule.
4) The photo editor should have made sure that there were at least two people taking photos at the event and gotten the photos the day of or the next day to post on the blog.
5) The advisor, you, could have maybe pushed everyone involved a bit more to get the article complete accordingly.
Primary Author – I know that the author of this piece had some difficulty gathering the information because she had to anticipate the event and then “fill in the blanks” so I know that she did the best she could.
News Editor – Since this is only the first draft I know that the final draft must be alot better than the first due to the editing process because I know we have an amazing News Editor; Alessia
Editor in Chief – The EIC did a marvelous job with this article and I know it is excellent
Photography Editor- I LOVE YOU